Talk:Childbirth: Difference between revisions
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The article looks really, really good except I question this sentence "Childbirth is accompanied by severe pain and attendant anxiety." This may or may not be true. It depends on the woman in labor. I'd suggest writing this instead Childbirth is | The article looks really, really good except I question this sentence "Childbirth is accompanied by severe pain and attendant anxiety." This may or may not be true. It depends on the woman in labor. I'd suggest writing this instead Childbirth is '''often''' accompanied by severe pain and attendant anxiety instead. | ||
: {{done}} [[User:Andrew Steinborn|Andrew Steinborn]] 22:19, 4 August 2010 (UTC) | |||
::My mother had five kids and described childbirth as a few gas pains. LOL! For me it was pure he** and in those days you didn't get any anesthetic. I assisted at a labor and delivery last spring and the doctor was very happy to prescribe an epidural. Thank goodness! I often think I would have missed those two c-sections if I had an epidural too. [[User:Mary Ash|Mary Ash]] 22:23, 4 August 2010 (UTC) | |||
Latest revision as of 16:23, 4 August 2010
Explaining edits
First, Mary, you've been including a good deal of metadata, which only goes in the metadata subpage, in several main articles. The only metadata that goes into the main page is {{subpages}}.
I removed whitespace. In general, extra line breaks are needed only if one is trying to format the position of a graphic or table.
The stages of labor are principally pertinent to vaginal delivery. Episiotomy is pertinent to the second stage. In your draft, everything is at the same hierarchical level. Howard C. Berkowitz 00:43, 4 August 2010 (UTC)
- I did not remove the text that came with starting the article. I left that to the editor. I did not list when an episiotomy is done but left that as a separate section in case anyone wanted to expand it. I also removed the opinion, not based on fact, concerning the episotomy. The US government public domain article I used to reference the article did not include that information.
- Mary Ash 00:51, 4 August 2010 (UTC)
- There may still be some confusion about the role of an Editor. As Chris Key suggested, "expert" may be a better term with respect to fact checking. We do not assume anyone will copy/flow edit the article. I haven't done source checking, but if you are just pasting material from a public domain site, you aren't synthesizing in the way we try to do.
- Unless you are an Editor in the workgroup, do not simply remove an addition claiming it is opinion. Mention your concern on the talk page and discuss it. Howard C. Berkowitz 00:56, 4 August 2010 (UTC)
- Thanks for letting me know. BTW I am not an expert on vaginal deliveries as I had two c-sections. Mary Ash 01:23, 4 August 2010 (UTC)
- Unless you are an Editor in the workgroup, do not simply remove an addition claiming it is opinion. Mention your concern on the talk page and discuss it. Howard C. Berkowitz 00:56, 4 August 2010 (UTC)
Article looks good but...
The article looks really, really good except I question this sentence "Childbirth is accompanied by severe pain and attendant anxiety." This may or may not be true. It depends on the woman in labor. I'd suggest writing this instead Childbirth is often accompanied by severe pain and attendant anxiety instead.
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Andrew Steinborn 22:19, 4 August 2010 (UTC)
- My mother had five kids and described childbirth as a few gas pains. LOL! For me it was pure he** and in those days you didn't get any anesthetic. I assisted at a labor and delivery last spring and the doctor was very happy to prescribe an epidural. Thank goodness! I often think I would have missed those two c-sections if I had an epidural too. Mary Ash 22:23, 4 August 2010 (UTC)